Sunday, November 8, 2009

Ode to love

A few not so rhyming lines on a very remarkable feeling we all know as Love, something which evades us when we pursue it and sometimes we are even blind to, even on the face of it. The poem below, though crudely scripted, puts across some of most cherished thoughts one nurtures merely hoping his love would be reciprocated some day.....



When will I ask her on a sunlit moon

To come with me for a walk in a moonlit night

But will she say yes?

When will I rest my head on her lap

And she will caresses my hair with her slender fingers

But will she be game for it?

When will I take her on the bike

And I will show her the latest flick

But will she have time for me?

When will I have dinner with her,

And pour my heart out to her,

But will she listen to me?

When will I get to care for her,

And hold her hands and look in her eyes

But will she also care for me?

But will I only think and keep quiet?


25 comments:

  1. this hints at someone who has a bike and someone who remains silent....and still craves for love....ak.a pyaar....do i get some guesses!!!

    Nimrod 1.0

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  2. remove this.
    this is a community blog not a personal one.
    posts like these should be on personal blogs.

    In favour of IMI blog community

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  3. yep remove this comment

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  4. Gud piece..tastefully done. Hope the author gets what he wants :)

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  5. ohhhhhh.........
    now i know
    its racmo
    imi blog community, plz confirm it

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  6. thanks shobhit ...somebody finds the not so rhyming words a gud piece

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  7. plz ban the rakmo anywher from the blog...vedank don't use his name in comments or elsewhere

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  8. dont ban racmo.. this community will die then...

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  9. RAKMO we love you....

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  10. A reply.....

    Why don't you ask me to come for a walk?
    So we can go out and have a nice talk.
    Been waiting for you ever so long
    To take you into comfort and move on
    Why haven't you asked me out so far?
    Been patiently counting every minute and hour
    Open up please,your silence is killing me
    Embrace me and set us free.

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  11. When will I ask her, on a sunlit moon
    Walk hand in hand, as possible as soon
    But will she say yes?


    When will I rest, my head on her lap
    Live my whole life, in a very short nap
    But will she be game for it?


    When will I take her, on my bike
    And live it to the full, the ride of my life.
    But will she have time for me?


    A candle light dinner, just her and me,
    No I or You, just we, we and we,
    But will she listen to me?


    When will I get to care for her,
    Will this thought in reality, would ever occur
    But will she also care for me?


    But will I only think and keep quiet?

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  12. IMI blog committee has said that my poem is not rhyming ..and so this is the version with rhymes

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  13. I beleive the above has been the person who has Actually written the poem, rather then the one who claims ownership of it!!!!....Cheers!! Copyright infringement!!

    Nimrod 1.0

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  14. I know who the author is, but if he doesn't want to disclose his identity even I can't....
    but believe me.. it's certainly not the one who is trying to claim it...

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  15. I have come to know that a good for nothing person called RAKMO is claiming my poem to be his and going all over the world showing this poem as his .

    The IMI blog committee should come out with a clear statement that atleast RAKMO has not written this .

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  16. we know the previous comment is a conspiracy to defame rakmo.
    why was he quiet for such a long time.
    why he is replying as anonymous.
    we have seen the rough draft of the poem in rakmo's system.
    its clear that rakmo is the actual author of this masterpiece.
    please stay away from such activity.
    I request IMI blog committee to remove such comment

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  20. Another question that has arisen is a girl has replied to the anonymous poet , but the girl is also anonymous . Who is the girl ? SEARCH ON ...anybody helping her to find would be suitable rewarded ...
    Her reply


    Why don't you ask me to come for a walk?
    So we can go out and have a nice talk.
    Been waiting for you ever so long
    To take you into comfort and move on
    Why haven't you asked me out so far?
    Been patiently counting every minute and hour
    Open up please,your silence is killing me
    Embrace me and set us free.

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  21. Real Poet of "Ode to Love": Akshit
    Thenks !!! U Rock!!!

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  22. Exactly.....
    The author of this beautiful poem is Akshit Kumar Gupta !!!!!
    You rock man !!!! Racmo can't even think of what you have written !!!!

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  23. Thanks for finding the poem beautiful ...

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